Some parents believe children ' leisure activities should always be educational but others think it will cause more pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some parents believe children ' leisure activities should always be educational but others think it will cause more pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Certain individuals believe that all activities engaged by children during their free time should be always be based on academic type while others think this will predispose them to more pressure. In my opinion, i strongly disagree with the sentence which says children recreational play should always based on educational activities. Both view will be explained in details in this discussion.
To begin with, restricting children 's play educational type during their leisure period Wii not help them to have good interpersonal relationships with other family members And their colleagues in school. Since these children always read even when playing will not let them to be free with family relations. They will not know what is happening within their homes. Not only that , in school,they will tend to select and move with brilliant students. For instance, the educational journal published by Nigerian schools says, dull children are rarely been played with by smart ones.
On the other hand,as believed by others that basing children 's play on academic only will have negative impact on them. Such as having mental challenges like depression. As these children have been psycheducated by their parents that they must excel in school work. If they fail, they will believe nothing good can come out of them. More so, these type of children tend to have personality problem. They feel inferior around other people which make them to keep to themselves. Also , they cannot relate and communicate freely. For example,a child struggling with school work is been give extra lesson teacher to coach him so he can perform better but when he sit for exams and he fail. He will not be happy, if parents talk negatively to him He might commit suicide.
In conclusion, in my view , children's free periods should not be tailored only on educational activities as it will hinder their relation with people and also pressure on they may have negative effect such as killing selves.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08024691358 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6061111123 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564814814815 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1140770348 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4444444444 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314848925881 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100646361183 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774575610428 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219428399012 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880122460965 0.056905535591 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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