Child rearing is unarguably not an easy job as it requires a huge amount of patience and determination. In most societies, child rearing is often associated with women's job, whilst some people opine that men has just an equal ability in this role. In this essay, I will explain why, while I agree that fathers' involvement in children development is important, women are still better able in parenting than men.
Firstly, women are often considered to be easier to adapt to their role as a parent because during pregnancy and afterwards, the changes in their hormone system facilitates their nurturing needs. On top of that, they also benefit from the physical proximity with their offspring, in which it is easier for a mother and her baby to be attached securely in this regard. Most of the time, even when the child has grown, the mother maintains the status of the primary caregiver due to her high engagement at home. For instance, in Indonesia, it is not uncommon for women to be a stay at home mother to raise children and take care of the household.
Regarding the fathers, nowadays more people have realized the importance of fathers' involvement in raising a child and its benefit for children's self esteem and social skills. Unfortunately, in most families, fathers still take more role as an authoritative figure, hence however involved they are in the process, they are still not as emotionally close to their children as that of mothers. In addition, their responsibility to support their family financially also limit their time at home and make physical proximity with the children exclusive. The instance can be seen in most families in Indonesia, where fathers, although they have become more involved in children development compared to the past, still can not be as involved as that of mothers due to the responsibility they had.
In summary, I believe that both mother and father hold important roles in raising a child, but in this case, women obtain several benefits from biological mechanisms to social expectation, that facilitate them to be an excellent parent more easily than men.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'manned'.
Suggestion: manned
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in summary', 'on top of that']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246268656716 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.139303482587 0.155533422707 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0796019900498 0.0946595960268 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0746268656716 0.0501214627716 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0572139303483 0.0437548338989 131% => OK
Prepositions: 0.144278606965 0.122226691241 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0348258706468 0.0403226058552 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78352811146 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0348258706468 0.0326793684256 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.089552238806 0.0861772015684 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00746268656716 0.021408717616 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124378109453 0.011925033212 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2179.0 1933.35771543 113% => OK
No of words: 363.0 316.048096192 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00275482094 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35261707989 0.374742101984 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.264462809917 0.28420135186 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203856749311 0.203846283523 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.118457300275 0.137316102897 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78352811146 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512396694215 0.56093040696 91% => OK
Word variations: 54.8553436296 60.7387585426 90% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 30.25 20.7743622355 146% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6846978531 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.583333333 127.492653851 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.25 20.7743622355 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.25 0.814263465372 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 56.6962809917 49.1944974215 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.56880733945 1.69124875643 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409561314807 0.332605444948 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145949355171 0.102741220458 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0463870033269 0.0668466124924 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.638355497772 0.534860350844 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151188540397 0.148594505496 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188134442368 0.134430193775 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964067506841 0.0742795772207 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.312288551628 0.324371583561 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.138343028698 0.0638462369009 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290256754839 0.228012699653 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889393605681 0.058150111329 153% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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