In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this a positive or negative development?
At present, some people are showing a significant inclination towards individualism by prioritizing their own aspirations and ambitions above the interests of society. This essay will explain why it will be a detriment.
To begin with, the major reason for this is that individualism is often praised for giving people the freedom to control their own lives. When individuals focus on their personal goals, it can lead to significant growth and help them discover more about themselves without any external negative intervention. Furthermore, this journey of self-discovery often brings a sense of fulfillment and contentment. As a result, those who passionately pursue their dreams often feel more satisfied and find more meaning in life, which ultimately makes them happier and healthier overall.
On the other hand, it is important to acknowledge the drawbacks of excessive individualism. One significant concern is the widening gap it can create in society. If individuals prioritize their own goals without considering the needs of others, it would lead to inequality. This can result in a breakdown of social cohesion and solidarity, leading to feelings of isolation and disconnection in society. Furthermore, uncontrolled individualism may exacerbate inequality and injustice, as those with greater resources and opportunities are better positioned to pursue their personal goals, while others are left behind. For instance, students who opt for private tutoring instead of participating in group discussions at school may feel isolated from their peers and teachers, further exacerbating inequality within the educational system.
To conclude, while individualism offers the benefits of personal freedom and satisfaction, in my opinion, its uncontrolled growth can lead to division and disconnection in society. It is crucial to find a balance between individual freedom and communal objectivity. By doing so, they may create a society that embraces both personal autonomy and collective responsibility, resulting in a more fair and cohesive community for everyone.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of society. This essay will explain why it will be a detriment. To begin with, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, while, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74110032362 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3135049806 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588996763754 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2127031293 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.266666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23708853911 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713094829588 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567262510661 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138705822973 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184696916034 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of society. This essay will explain why it will be a detriment. To begin with, ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, while, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74110032362 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3135049806 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588996763754 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2127031293 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.266666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23708853911 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713094829588 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567262510661 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138705822973 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184696916034 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.