Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries.
What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people who know about famous people in history.
It is true that famous people in history are not more well-known than international pop and movie stars for the young in a country. There are a number of reasons behind this phenomenon and several solutions should be adopted to improve the situation.
This issue might be attributable to two main reasons. Underlying cause is that history lessons in school are so boring for many students. This is because teachers don’t know how to make lessons more interesting with teenagers. To be specific, teachers don’t have suitable methods to refresh and attract the attention of students. Another contributing factor is that development of social media contributes to the fame of international pop and movie stars. The young tend to spend almost their spare time surfing the internet, such as Facebook, Instagram, Zalo,... where having images of celebrities everywhere.
There are several actions that could be taken to mitigate the problem mentioned above. Firstly, the school should organize some festivals and competitions related to history and culture and increase experience by visiting museums and historical exhibitions for students. By this way, the young can know more about people and events in the past. Secondly, producing films and music related to history is a great way to transfer to youngsters. The important things is that having the joining of celebrities because they play important role in the media
In conclusion, boring lessons and development of social media are reasons for people in history to be overshadowed and setting up special events and making historical films and music is the perfect way to make people in history famous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28301886792 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79758834248 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539622641509 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3290735584 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9285714286 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314818295496 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928707310966 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117750609993 0.0667982634062 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202457741619 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806119279675 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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