In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this modern civilisation, opinions differ as to whether it is much superior to use other types of materials in lieu of animals to make food, clothing items and medicine. While I partly agree with this notion, I would advocate that animals still play such an indispensable role in the production of necessities.
On the one hand, a vast array of factors has convinced me to believe that products made of animals are no longer the top priorities of individuals. Firstly, numerous people are currently prone to have vegetable-based diets rather than those based on animals because many studies have proved that vegetables can provide adequate nutrients and essential minerals. Hence, consuming vegetables could reduce the risks of contracting potential cardiovascular diseases such as heart attack or stroke. Furthermore, excessive utilisation of animals to satisfy human’s purposes could be considered to be one of the determinants putting a great number of animals on the verge of extinction. To illustrate, Vietnamese authorities have categorised wild tigers as an endangered species since poachers kill them to have their bones, which is thought to be a good ingredient to make medicine. Consequently, these illegal actions might lead to the loss of biodiversity and genetic structures.
On the other hand, there are a host of justifications prevailing me on conceding that humans still need to use animals to manufacture necessities. The first reason is that animals’ meat can be more nourishing in comparison to vegetables. This can be exemplified that the amount of protein and omega 3 in tuna or seafood might be higher than those in water spinach or carrot. Accordingly, eating enough meat could provide sufficient energy for organisms to function properly. Moreover, the quality of products from animals could be better than those made artificially. For instance, many Vietnamese manufacturers are keen on making use of the fur of sheep to make coats instead of synthetic fabric owning to the fact that those made of this material might be time-tolerant. Therefore, consumers gradually tend to prefer necessities based on animals.
In conclusion, apparently, it cannot be denied that sacrificing animals’ lives for the purposes of humans would have plenty of ominous bearings; nevertheless, I want to affirm that animals are still crucial in the manufacture of food, clothing items and medicine.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is modern civilisation, opinions differ as to whether it is much superior to use other types ...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
...ctures. On the other hand, there are a host of justifications prevailing me on conc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36578947368 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12427166028 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568421052632 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4878247137 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4375 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.125 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151005572337 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479446132822 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474223568554 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106892580507 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386276686693 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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