In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? disagree?
Since the beginning of human society, hunting has always been an integral part of human daily life. Nowadays, there has been opinions that food sources that came from animals, as well as clothes or medicine that used animals are unnecessary. I personally disagree with this statement for two reasons, which are the cost of alternative materials and the possibility that this tendency might lead to detrimental effect on people health.
To commence with, artificial meat is far more expensive than normal meat. This is because from the beginning, the ingredients that scientists use to create such kinds of meat are already more expensive. Furthermore, the efforts that they have to put into creating it are significantly greater and take a longer period of time. For instance, each plate of man-made meat that are offered by luxury restaurants nowadays can cost up to thousands of dollar. People from the lower levels of the society, especially the underpriviledged, therefore, would not be able to have access to such kinds of meat.
Additionally, it is true that people can still survive without meat, but it does not mean that they can still develop in a normal way. Especially to young children, they need protein, which is found in meat, to grow and to develop their brain during the early stages of their lives. Protein not only benefit youngsters, but also advantageous to adults since this substance helps human injuries heal faster. Moreover, if medicine are not tested on animals before being sold at pharmacies, the citizens would be facing more risks of adverse effects. Vaccination can be set as an illustration, if vaccines are not carefully tested before reaching people, death might even occur. In addition, clothes that are made of animals’ skin sometimes represent people wealth. Hermes, for example, use crocodiles’ skin to make luxury bags for women who has a lot of money.
In conclusion, I disagree with the opinion that food, clothes and medicine are unnecessary for the aforementioned reasons.
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- In their advertising businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way Why is this Do you think it is a positive or negative development 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16060606061 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80820815786 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59696969697 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7610228457 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.4375 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155612997333 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052441181922 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718546785757 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128473874102 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856765512958 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.