More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number,…) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is said that these days, individual information such as address and telephone number of those who use the Internet-based areas, for instance, social networks and online banking services, is revealed increasingly more. In my opinion, I believe that this circumstance is both positive and negative.
On the one hand, revealing personal information online has a number of advantages for both users and the government. Firstly, when there is an illegal attempt from a stranger to enter the users' account, Facebook, for example, will send a warning message or email through the email given by its customers. It would be more straightforward for the service providers in addressing the unexpected security problems of their users. Secondly, for banking purposes, the bank staff could minimize their mistakes in exchanging the amount of money between private accounts as well as take the customers' data as a cornerstone for the complicated complaints related to legislation.
On the other hand, despite the security policies, there are potential drawbacks on that more people put their individual data online. New scams appear on the social networking areas that are conducted by incognito hackers to steal users' information for their illegal commercial purposes. Furthermore, Internet users might be threatened to pay for the loans which have extreme interest and even suffer from the government's punishment in case they can not show any evidence and proof for their innocence.
In conclusion, although it brings along a variety of benefits for Internet-based areas users to put their personal data online, there are unpredictable problems that have been resolved by the government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...en private accounts as well as take the customers data as a cornerstone for the complicat...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...treme interest and even suffer from the governments punishment in case they can not show an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4465648855 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99166772105 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618320610687 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.3109150182 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.7 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.2 7.06120827912 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308392152334 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117863662773 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783032071484 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18277319557 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692964776381 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.