Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development; however, others think the social value is lost as a result of economic development. To what extent do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh its disadvantages?
Nowadays, economic development is one of the most important factors that every country should focus on. However, some people believe that it is the main reason for the lost social values. Although there exist some drawbacks, I still believe that its advantages do outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, boosting the nation’s economy helps enhance citizen’s life in different aspects such as living standard, health care and education. The wealthier the country is the more jobs it creates and thus the unemployment rate also witness a significant decline. Moreover, economic development helps people grant an access to modern health care which makes them happier and gets rid of anxiety, and thus increase the working productivity. Another benefit is by investing money in the education sector, the qualification of teachers, subjects as well as facilities at schools will also be improved, consequently, a child will receive more quality education programs which helps them develop a better career in the future.
On the other hand, one of the major drawbacks of economic development is the losing social values it caused. While nuclear families become popular, and due to the economic expansion, both parents have to spend most of their time at an office, leaving their kids at home alone. As a result, a child may not be well educated and thus lose some valuable social lessons. For example, lots of children nowadays do not show respect to elderly people, and some with lacks of basic communication skills become socially alienated. Moreover, it even worse while being unsupervised, these kids easily engage in antisocial activities and commit crimes.
In conclusion, I personally believe that the benefits which are brought by the economic advancement of a country do outweigh its disadvantages. Most of the negative effects are due to the lack of consideration from parents and families to children, thus by raising the awareness of them may help solve the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...economic development helps people grant an access to modern health care which makes them ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30817610063 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89266472247 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584905660377 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0988174761 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220572763419 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779269864835 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658464472288 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139544880185 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521409487552 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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