Most developed countries spend a large proportion of their health budgeys on expensive medical technology and procedures. This money should be spent instead on health education to keep people well. To what extent do you agree with this
Health education has been taken by many countries as a great mission. Spending a huge sum of money, is thought by many that, required for the expensive advanced medical treatments and procedures. Whereas, it is considered by some that, money should be used to give health education. In my opinion, although health education can tackle certain diseases, it is not always possible in case of emergencies.
To begin with, since health education has a limited role to meet numerous diseases, the focus should be on the treatment. For example, serious accident cases require many diagnostic evaluations and surgeries, it is certainly expensive, but health education will not save the life here. In addition, certain illnesses such as cancer and stroke can not cure with preventive measures. Similarly, hereditary ailments like cardiac problems need surgeries and psychological problems need proper medication, these would not cure with only health education.
Furthermore, in spite of continuous awareness programs through television, people may not have the discipline to keep away from unhealthy practices. To illustrate, despite having the knowledge about fast food related health issues, many people consume it, because of its taste.
However, providing health education would prevent many epidemic diseases like small pox, bird flu and so on. Secondly, it would help people to follow hygienic practices which will help them to avoid spreading of many diseases. Moreover, AIDS and other sexually transmitted diseases would be eradicated with effective health education.
In conclusion, even though delivering an effective health education can prevent many diseases, it can not reduce the cost of treatment which required in emergency situations. Hence, despite of spending more money for health education, the focus should be on advanced treatment and procedures to maintain the health of the people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59310344828 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81748405657 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603448275862 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6779753727 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.133333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24364315664 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902113580915 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499852734624 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140509491975 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544304619223 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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