Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 from driving motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The proliferation of state-of-the-art technology has resulted in a wide range of inventions that are helpful to almost every societal field including transportation. Yet, there are some young people who do not take into account some potential dangers that they have to confront when utilizing breakneck-velocity methods of transport, especially motor-based vehicles, leading to the problem of the rising rate of teen death. To prevent this issue from recurring continually, individuals have come up with the idea that government should promulgate a regulation forbidding those who are under 24 from driving motorbikes. Personally, I completely concur with this viewpoint as it could bring about certain benefits to both the legislation and citizens themselves.
To commence with, I would argue how this approach could act as a precursor to a better quality of life. Adolescents are still innocent people that do not have a full understanding of real-life situations; therefore, thanks to their hysterical behaviors, they will neglect other recommendations and just do everything on their own without predicting the adverse consequences. Utilizing motorbikes improperly is also a habit of them, which means that their lives are on the verge of being extremely deteriorated due to their carelessness. By enforcing the law of prohibiting driving under the allowed age with zero tolerance, governments will be likely to help them avoid undesirable results or even deaths. Moreover, they can decrease the proportion of road accidents considerably, resulting in the restoration of public order in the area and also laying a solid foundation for a healthy atmosphere that suits the purpose of upbringing.
Besides, I want to discuss more solutions in order to ameliorate the situation along with the ban of under-24-year-old people using motor vehicles. Firstly, introducing extra lessons associated with road safety could benefit juveniles to some extent as they become more aware of road regulations. For example, they will know more about the fees that they have to pay off after violating the traffic principles and stringent punishments such as license suspension or even prison sentences if they harm someone badly; therefore, they will focus more on transporting scrupulously regardless of types of vehicles that they are utilizing. Secondly, last but not least, inviting young victims of traffic accidents for a speech creates opportunities for them to witness and visualize what will happen to them in a safe way, which has the capability of acting as a contributor to them constituting good habits when being a road user.
In conclusion, it seems to me that along the prohibition, governments should cooperate with schools and certain individuals so that students themselves could not only deepen their knowledge related to transportation but also indirectly keep their surroundings stable in a peaceful way
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld people using motor vehicles. Firstly, introducing extra lessons associated wit...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a safe way" with adverb for "safe"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... and visualize what will happen to them in a safe way, which has the capability of acting as ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a peaceful way" with adverb for "peaceful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...directly keep their surroundings stable in a peaceful way
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1615.20841683 153% => OK
No of words: 450.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47555555556 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23929271353 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 176.041082164 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608888888889 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.762377437 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.0 106.682146367 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1428571429 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178220485041 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05436113206 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523906267023 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956202582996 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477522473416 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 78.4519038076 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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