Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is said that the multicultural societies where there is a blended of variety people with different races and ethnics brings more advantage to a country than its disadvantages. For this issue, I deem that there are such benefits and drawbacks as follow.
To begin with, one of the tremendous negative effect that can be seen easily in the society which mixed culture is the cultural tensions. For example, Westerns’ culture are more open in having sex before marriage whereas that is opposed to the chinese tradition. Even up to now, some parents in the chinese family still imply such reflections as a girl virginity is important and this will be checked by the wedding night. However, in countries like America or Australia, there is not any of that thought. Furthermore, racial disparity and religious intolerance are the other two factors that considered as a contribution to such issue.
On the other hand, beneficial in many aspects gained from such trend is cannot deniable. The advantageous of cultural diversity can be used to enhance the citizens awareness and knowledge due to the fact that cultural values are being shared among the society. For instance, chinese lunar new year have been celebrated in recent years in parts of the world because of the effect of culture exchanged between chinese students and other foreign students. Moreover, conflicts and war will be alleviated thanks to the mutual relationships between countries, and therefore, the relations regarding economy, tourism or social will generally be improved.
In conclusion, the benefits listed above outweigh the disadvantage. there are far more of what a country can acquire in a multicultural society than what can be expected. it is critical to maintain the social equality and religious harmony across a nation with several races and ethnics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23569023569 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86561856744 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59595959596 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.940433951 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.071428571 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109513295257 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389854003476 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613595511985 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928175747225 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858792751828 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.