Some people think that advertising targeting children should be banned as it is negative to youngsters. Although I can see the severe impacts of those advertisements on children, I believe that such a ban is not the idea.
The first reason to oppose to those advertisements is that much of them is for food and drinks that are very unhealthy but appetizing, which encourage gullible children to consume them without knowing their bad effects on their health. As a consequence, such fatty, sugary and salty food create obese, unhealthy
youngster, with bad eating habits, leading to paying a high price in terms of extra medical care such children will eventually require. Another appealing reason is that it it misleading to use children’s
favourite heroes and cartoon characters in advertisements. Children are unable to distinguish between TV programs and commercials and will pester their parents to purchase those products. If if they do not, their children might have a feeling of frustration and inadequacy.
On the other hand, although some people might have the idea that banning advertisements on children
is the best way, it seems impossible to eliminate online advertisements as they are difficult to define whether
they are aiming at children or not. In addition, more and more advertisements now should not be prohibited as they are non-commercial and promote creativity, core values such as friendship and honesty and more significantly, educational resources such as courses or books. Moreover, the best way to combat with such problem is that children should be taught about critical thinking skills so that they would not be misled by those advertisements.
In conclusion, children are impressionable to the misleading information from advertisements targeting
them. This problem could be solved with a ban on those adverts, but I suppose that there are better options
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14244066505 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6389020475 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.333333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331135748262 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134875157705 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106679798199 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144826571235 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104020745377 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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