Entrepreneurship in colleges is recently encouraged among students. This trend is believed to bring about many drawbacks, while advocates of it argue that this idea might benefits students in some ways.
Starting a business as an undergraduate may create many downsides in terms of academic results and financial condition. First, students take risks to allocate a considerable amount of money to invest in their business. If they fail and go bankrupt or even are swallowed up by other campanies, they will have to suffer significant debt burdens and do not have enough capacity to pay them off. Second, running a business while in college might have an severe impact on a student’s academic performance as they pay too much attention to their pursuit and might fall behind with their study. As a result, students will not achieve good scores and have to earn a lousy qualification, which leads to worse potential in the job market.
Nevertheless, students can have a better comprehension of their faculty and achieve needed experience for future business when starting up since colleges. First, since classroom learning can be brief, abstract, and impractical, making students often complain that they will never be able to apply what they are learning in the “real world”, starting up is a golden opportunity to apply their knowledge of the curriculum into real-life context and offer them a great insight of what they are learning. Moreover, students can obtain practical experiences in the market such as social relationship, networking, leadership, and, more importantly, the ability of planning. Even if they fail, those aforementioned skills will be the head start in business administration.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the advantages of working while in colleges certainly outweigh its drawbacks.
- Some colleges encourage students to create businesses while they are still in school Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages 72
- Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student In this regard beers have more of an impact that teachers do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion 66
- In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 67
- Bullying is a big problem in many schools What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest 70
- Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36458333333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06200195938 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614583333333 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2681484442 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27700198593 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932740490074 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520030758939 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173508728943 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439826018258 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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