Nowadays shopping has become a new favourite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? Should they be encouraged to develop other hobbies? How?
These days, people have shown an ever-rising interest in shopping as a fresh leisure pursuit throughout societies, particularly among teenagers. There are several factors involved and reason to provoke them to adopt new leisure interests.
The prevailing reason that why the youth have been inclined toward shopping is mainly due to the advances in technology. They perhaps have maintained a growing interest in digital accessories such as trendy cellphones, portable gadgets, laptops and audio-visual multimedia, where are extensively available in shops. Therefore, they go to the shopping centers to be not only well-informed about fresh pieces of equipment but also indulging themselves of sightseeing shops for the leading-edge tools. The second underlying rational behind that would appear be the thriving centers and malls, where people can both purchase their needs and indulge themselves in the public and lifestyle amenities located in the markets. For example, there is a pupular hypermarket in Shiraz which adolescents spend their nightlifes on either shopping-related activities or in pastime amenities like posh cafeterias and classy restaurants, making them to be taking the advances of popular facilities.
On the other hand, it seems to be wise that juveniles should perhaps pursue the other desirable activities like water activities. This will probably not only curb the amount of junk food consumption in the city center but also boost their general health. Furthermore, such historical and cultural spots might be the other available options for juveniles , making them to possibly become aware of their country, and with a higher sense of responsibility and patriotic sentiments .
Overall, It appears that the increasing tendency on shopping among youngesters as a form of leisure pursuit has been mainly due to the technology development and popular shopping centers . However, if they display interests on other activities related to water sports and cultural and historical gathering points, it will potentially affect their health and public attitudes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67412140575 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99232581445 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603833865815 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.6643835081 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.0 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0833333333 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217099309679 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715657575067 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042646215606 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115055166123 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401851001998 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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