Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example is an increasingly popular among young people. In my opinion, I believe that this is an overall negative trend.
Having great admiration for well-known athletes and entertainers might have positive effects on teenagers. First of all, the talents and achievements of media and sport idols could inspire young people to develop their potential abilities. For example, my brother is a big fan of Michael Phelps, so that he practices swimming everyday and has achieved a lot of gold medals at his school. Secondly, youngsters who take part in fan clubs of their idols could be provided with more opportunities to make friends with like-minded people. As a result, they would have a rich social life.
On the other hand, idolising celebrities who are not excellent role models could result in negative effects. One reason for this view is that young adults tend to spend a lot of time following what their idols do or where they would go. This may distract them from studying at school and they could a bad academic results. Furthermore, young adults who are not mature enough to judge what is suitable and proper within society , they may copy their idols’ bad behaviors such as smoking, drinking alcohol or even drugs, resulting in spoil young people’s health and future life.
In conclusion, although supporters can be inspired by the talents of sport and media stars, their bad behaviors could exercise bad influences on the youth. Therefore, I certainly hold the view that it is a negative trend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...l Phelps, so that he practices swimming everyday and has achieved a lot of gold medals a...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'result'?
Suggestion: result
...at school and they could a bad academic results. Furthermore, young adults who are not ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...at is suitable and proper within society , they may copy their idols' bad beh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01132075472 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67474796366 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7193080739 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.153846154 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297625323066 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963318317319 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109048701634 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189350081774 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124996460877 0.056905535591 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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