It is true that a majority of old people these days still believe in conventional ideas that often seem incompatible with the needs of their young counterparts. While I agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe others are still useful and should not be forgotten.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that a large number of ideas from the past are becoming less relevant for young people. For example, people used to be advised to learn a profession and find a secure job for the rest of their life, while workers nowadays often expect to have much more diversity and flexibility from their job. In addition, there also seems to have a big difference in the attitudes towards gender roles between the old and young generations. Old-school terms such as "homemaker", "breadwinner" are not in the dictionary of the young anymore, instead, they start to launch more campaigns or convey messages to change the stereotype of the elderly about the role of women and men.
On the other hand, there is no doubt that some traditional views and values are still applicable to the modern world. For instance, it has been a practice for Vietnamese people to do their job carefully and with dignity, do not be afraid of making mistakes, always take pride in their contribution, and these behaviors can surely benefit young people when they enter today's competitive job market. Also, children are always taught to be respectful and caring to everybody at a very young age, especially in this globalized world, where people judge each other by their behavior and verbalism. Finally, I believe that young people would lead a happier life if they had a more "old-fashioned" sense of community and neighborliness.
In conclusion, although the views of old people often appear to be unhelpful in this fast-paced world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas as irrelevant.
- Thanks to the development of air travel and telecommunication contacts between different parts of the world have developed To what extend do you agree or disagree 52
- Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes Discuss both sides and give your opinion 67
- In many countries governments spend a lot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals However some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view 78
- The quality of healthcare a person receives should not depend on the size of their bank balance The government is responsible for providing a high level of healthcare for all its citizens To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
- In many countries governments spend a lot of money celebrating national holidays and festivals However some people think that spending money on these celebrations is a waste To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 41, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Line 2, column 719, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lderly about the role of women and men. On the other hand, there is no doubt tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05079365079 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23849981911 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565079365079 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.3497736369 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.636363636 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1818181818 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213194221435 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087915814223 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488498440228 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144498413151 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446029812469 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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