One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

There are number of lifestyle changes, you can make to improve your overall health and increase your life expectancy. This essay will examine a signaficant positive and negative effects of medical treatment.

The great advantage of improving medical carefulness come as a result of the both progressions in developing hospital's conditions and medical responsibilities for inhabitants. Improving medical condition plays a main role in all of the hospitals. First of all, cheerfulness of people will boost. The reason for this that, they do not suffer from a disease for a longer time of period. They will also have the time to spend with family. For example, most of the patients do not able to perform their dairy plans are permitted to stay in the hospital also, it can be difficult. All in all, there are number of conditions for medical treatment in the home. This kind of convienient atmosphere become very benificial to inhabitants to spent their rest of the life painless.

Ion the another hand, nowadays, there is signaficant disadvantage of the medical care. To make matter worse,majority of the medical treatment have a shortage of accomadition. After this issue will create uncapable care services into poor condition. Moreover, this can change inhabitants attention about care services.

In conclusion, improved medical treatment rises the accomidation numbers over the years. In my opinion, this can be great development to make the inhabitants happier and they do not have to visit the hospital for their medical problems. For this, l convince that, hospital have a privaty care services to inhabitants.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0084182956 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548262548263 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1447491236 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5294117647 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2352941176 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265843451929 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082913759547 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459682316455 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163834592787 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010784195607 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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