Needless to say, the children's future is the most considerable point for their parents. In this case, their future life quality might depend on their financial responsibility from their early years. In my point of view, I agree with the point that children should learn how to manage their own money in order to use its advantages in the necessary times. There are two reasons to name that I am going to explain them below.
The first and the most prominent thing that comes to my mind is that when a child learns how to save his money, he can buy some life facilities, such as a house, more easily. It helps him to own a house in his adulthood maybe. For example my brother that is eleven years older than me bought a house in the wealthy region of the city as soon as he got married. After that, I figured out that he had some money in the bank for several years and so it facilitated him to own it without economic pressure on him. So saving money can help us to reach our living conditions better and easier.
Secondly, financial responsibility can provide us to be independent of others and even our own parents.
We naturally want to be independent in our adulthoods. So, that is the best way to trigger and practice our independence in the rest of the life. For instance, I departed from my family as soon as I got eighteen. This occurred after that I thought I can be independent. In other words, I saw that I am able to deal with the living alone difficulties. That is why I think that learning how to save money can help us to become independent better.
Taking everything into account, I am back the idea that parents should pay more attention in order to learn their children manage their money. So, managing money not only helps adults to reach their life position soon but also leads them to be independent of their parents at the time.
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 56
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 56
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 56
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4633431085 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52777418531 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521994134897 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5383343159 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5555555556 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297586064723 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815211963708 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937204062302 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170211213612 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108576423591 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 12.4159519038 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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