Never can anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of children’s education and time management for their parents. So computer games, the souvenir of 21st century, is one of the most prominent issues between the parents and the children. In my opinion children should prevent playing video games because of its vital disadvantages that makes them isolated and threats their healthiness.
Needless to say, the most prominent result of video games is children’s isolation. It compels them to stay at home all the day and sit In front of computers and play instead of playing with friends and communicate more in the society. For example my nephew, Ali, is an extreme gamer. He wakes up in the morning and immediately goes to his computer desk, after some hours his mother serves him his lunch and again he begins it until midnight and at least he sleeps at three or four o’clock. So he does not have enough time to study his lessons of school and play more practical with his friends in their quarter. So, it affords isolated children and affects their moralities in front of anybody.
Secondly, all of us are concerned about our healthiness during the life. We always prevent from the things that harms our body and in this case children are more vulnerable. As an example, my cousin, Reza, plays computer games adversely. His father took him to the doctor in order to abandon it but it did not work. After a few year he found himself obese and also his eyes became weaker day by day then he had to wear glasses after that and at least he got nerve tics that is not curable any more. So these menaces are reasonable items that signifies the dangers of time squandering because of computer games.
In conclusion, wasting time by children is one of the main issues the most of the parents deal with. I am strongly back the idea that kids should not be permitted to overplay that kind of games since it causes sequestration threats human health. At least mothers should advise kids enough and fathers should use some novel strategies to make children detested.
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- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
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...abandon it but it did not work. After a few year he found himself obese and also his eye...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, at least, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73626373626 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56684573305 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7379460321 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7777777778 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199672392534 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651845109049 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483732295812 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125774105961 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209148210772 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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