People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less
It is true that the consumption of beverages is increasing nowadays. From my perspective, there are various reasons to this phenomenon and measures should be taken to tackle it.
There are 2 main reasons behind this problem. Firstly, sugar can other addictive substances such as caffeine can be contained in this kind of drink, which means that they they can quickly boost the user’s concentration on work.However, once people consume excessively, their physical health will be more likely to depend on these sugar-based drinks. If not, people can easily be in tiring position to focus, which results in the less productivity and energy for a day, so, they probably resort to them again to restore their alertness. Furthermore, the expenditure in sugary drinks is becoming widespread as beverage companies are making more effort on the advertisements to attract the large quantities of consumers to raise their profit and revenue, especially targeting at children or teenager. For example the energy drink called Wakeup 247 is very popular with the young adult owing to the fact that it is being advertised more on the Internet and on television with the use of maintaining alertness for a working day, which is relatively suitable for those working in long hours with the heavy workload.
For those reasons mentioned above, there are different ways to solve this issue. First,people need to improve their awareness of soft drinks due to the fact that the overuse of sugary drinks can have adverse impacts on human body, for example they can cause heart attack or diabetes, so they ought to reduce their intake of this kind of drink. For instance, instead of drinking a cup of coffee, people can do various physical exercises to gain more energy or use the alternative drink such as fresh water. In addition, the Government should make a strict policy about the sugar-sweetened drinks such as making a ban of advertising them toward children, increasing the tax on these products or making a propaganda about the drawbacks of overconsumption of beverage to discourage the usage of this type of drink
In conclusion, more and more people are fond of soft drink owing to their addiction to it as well as its advertisement. With 2 solutions proposed above, I believe the situation will improve better and better.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...in this kind of drink, which means that they they can quickly boost the user’s concentrat...
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Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... boost the user’s concentration on work.However, once people consume excessively, their...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
...ifferent ways to solve this issue. First,people need to improve their awareness of soft...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04960835509 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84622606303 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543080939948 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.044556586 49.4020404114 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.166666667 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9166666667 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316648784562 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102872260498 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846575046579 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185357390187 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969003466895 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...in this kind of drink, which means that they they can quickly boost the user’s concentrat...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... boost the user’s concentration on work.However, once people consume excessively, their...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
...ifferent ways to solve this issue. First,people need to improve their awareness of soft...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04960835509 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84622606303 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543080939948 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.044556586 49.4020404114 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.166666667 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9166666667 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316648784562 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102872260498 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846575046579 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185357390187 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969003466895 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.