It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Revolving around the issue of public healthcare system is the suggestion that using governmental revenue on encouraging a healthy way of life so as to restrict illness is more pivotal than spending it on curing ailing people. In my opinion, I am not in favor of this idea due to the fact that diseases can be attributed to peculiar origins and genetic defects.
On the one hand, it is understandable to put an emphasis on promoting an active and hygienic living conditions and behaviors as a prevention act from illnesses. Admittedly, there is a plethora of ailments stemming from lifestyle-related cause such as obesity or diabetes resulted from overeating of junk food and lack of physical activities. Therefore, it is a plausible approach to conduct campaigns raising awareness among the citizens about the significance of sensible diets and regular exercises for the sakes of citizens themselves as well as that of the public revenue. If less people are hospitalized, the pressure on the healthcare system will be greatly alleviated so that doctors and resources can be focused on treating patients with more severe syndromes.
On the other hand, a balanced lifestyle alone is not sufficient to sustain the well-being of the whole population since some people are prone to ailments because of numerous causes. First of all, a large number of citizens may contract unprecedented diseases with unrecognizable roots such as corona virus. In this case, hospitalization is inevitable as prevention schemes have not been developed. Moreover, other people are born with hereditary diseases which are unavoidable even with dietary cautions. As a result, it might be unjustifiable to center more on advocating a healthy lifestyle while disregarding the fact that wellness programs for those who are genetically unhealthy is critically important.
In conclusion, while spending governmental resources on initiating a balanced way of living for illness prevention is a brilliant idea, it should not be considered as more eminent than spending it on curing diseased residents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to
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Suggestion: fewer
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, as well as that, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34250764526 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19255802617 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577981651376 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.5471684304 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.583333333 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.75 7.06120827912 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189330420428 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596046056948 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652778199392 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123992734788 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542506813769 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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