People in many countries have to spend more and more time away from their home. Why is this? What are the effects on people themselves and their families?
It is believed that in many countries people are obligated to spend far less time for their home than their occupations. This development stem from both the infrastructure planning of government and ability to earn a living of people while its consequences deteriorate into individuals and societies.
This tendency is becoming ubiquitous in many countries due to some undeniable reasons. Firstly, the infrastructure planning of government forces companies to move their manufactures away from the urban area to avoid its influences to the health of residents such as noise or pollutants. As a results, the labor force of them have to commute further distances for their working, so the more time they allocate it for commuting, the less time they can spend for themselves and families. Secondly, if the employees devote a huge amount of time on their careers, they will have lucrative salaries. In fact, all companies always have overtime policies for workers, so it is an appealing offer for those who desire to earn an extra living to better in living standards and improve the life qualities of their families. For instance, parents who works as both bread-winners might feasibly have more opportunities to support their families better than staying home parents
Although it has some positive impacts, undoubtedly detrimental effects are still found. Firstly, employees investing a lot time in their work can trigger severe health issues. The sedentary lifestyles and excessive consumption a lot of fast food due to the time consuming might be a roots of obesity diabetes, chronic illness which mostly exist in the both white and blue collars after their retirement. Furthermore, the pressure in working environments also contribute to some mental disorders such as stress and even suicides in many countries, especially in Japan. Secondly, children may lack of parental guides and attentions if their parents leave no time for them. By virtue of this, these offspring can easily experience feelings of loneliness and isolation at schools and home, leading to the negatively psychological issues such as autism and mental illness. Furthermore, they can also be the victims of bullying by their friends, facilitating the risk of following a path towards the criminal behaviors in the future.
In conclusion, people investing more time in careers brings a lot of advantages to individuals, but the detrimental influences of this trend are inevitable to both personal health and children development
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...sidents such as noise or pollutants. As a results, the labor force of them have to commut...
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Line 2, column 796, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ndards and improve the life qualities of their families. For instance, parents wh...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a root' or simply 'roots'?
Suggestion: a root; roots
...food due to the time consuming might be a roots of obesity diabetes, chronic illness wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 396.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33080808081 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97837129859 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.8874138554 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.733333333 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370040151762 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113577948625 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800400830685 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221431792817 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773293742478 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.