People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

People should follow the customs and traditions when
people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that people need to adopt the local customs and traditional values when they integrate in a alien country. I completely agree with this perspective.

Admittedly, there are an array of factors leading people to believe that following the customs and traditions in the host country is necessary when they live abroad. Firstly, they need to be aware of how social life in there area works in order to achieve their purposes. In fact, since entrepreneurs want to start-up in a completely new place, they have to understand business practices in there to win and keep their customers, which help their companies to flourish in the long term. Secondly, if people are not aware of culture in a new place, they are not welcomed by local people. This is particularly the case for Singapore, a civilized country, they believe those people who litter the street or spit gum in public spaces are dirty and ill-mannered.

On the other hand, people understand the traditions and customs in the new country can bring them many substantial benefits.Firstly, It help immigrants to overcome difficulties and experience more things to blend into new environment . For example, they can show the appreciation to local people as they can be aware of indigenous customs and be willing to take part in, which is the catalyst for them to overcoming cultural shock or language barriers. Secondly newcomers can benefit from richness of the experience which they will gain from enjoying aspects of local customs and traditions, enabling them to participate in community
life and avoid social isolation. During festivals and national holidays, especially,
they will feel like they ‘belong’ in their new country.

In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, It is inevitable to follow local traditions and customs if new residents want to adapt fully to a new community.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09803921569 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93287340975 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2617649241 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246283232632 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102553258666 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851232164774 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120563996147 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762966437886 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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