People should look after their health as a duty to the society where they live, rather than for their own benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes argued that people should prioritize their health as a social duty instead of their their own benefits. While I accept that personal health plays a role in the overall well-being of society, I still belive that it is more crucial for individual merits.
On the one hand, a healthy population can contribute sigificantly to the overall growth of a community. Initially, when people treat their heath well, they will reduce the risk of suffering from several deseases. This means that they are less likely to burden healthcare systems, leading to minimize in strain on medical resources. Consequently, government can allocate more funds to other aspects, such as education and infructructure. Moreover, personal health has a significant impact on the economic stability. For instance, with a good health, people are more likely to partcipate in workforce, increase the overall productivity, and contribute to economic growth.
On the other hand, it is crucial that people can gain numerous benefits for theirselves when they have a good health. To commence with, looking after health, people can have a better quality of life. Being healthy plays a role in a happy and fulfilling life. Only when people are healthy, they can contribute part of their to the society, the loved ones and those who are disadvantagous. Furthermore, a healthy life style can also increase life expectancy. In fact, may research studies have shown that the rate of life span of people who have the healthy lifestyle is much higher than those who do not care about their health or have the sedentary lifestyle.
In conclusion, it is true that when people care about their health, the community can gain several benefits, including reduce in strain on budgets and economic growth. However, I believe that people should prioritize their health because of theirselves first.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: their
...heir health as a social duty instead of their their own benefits. While I accept that perso...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...o the society, the loved ones and those who are disadvantagous. Furthermore, a healthy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1821192053 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79882037028 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513245033113 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1049503941 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8125 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1875 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274671736928 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924836653098 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871019028769 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184601060141 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567081595216 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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