The rich and the famous command greater respect in the modern society. In fact, values such as kindness, generosity and honesty are becoming irrelevant. Therefore, I agree with the argument that worldly riches and social standing have become the new measures of a person’s worth. One of the reasons for this development is that the media encourages young people to follow the wrong role models. Also it has become difficult for ethical people to succeed in this immoral world.
Youngsters these days choose the wrong people as their idols. They are misguided by the notion that a person should be wealthy and famous to be successful. They read about models, singers and actors having millions of followers on social media and want to be like them. They do not care whether the person they admire has character or integrity. They are blinded by the hype surrounding these people. Since they are always gazing at the ‘stars’, they do not get an opportunity to learn from the real heroes. Not surprisingly, a study conducted by a well-known university in 2016 revealed that 75% of girls aged between 14 and 18 years would rather be like Khloe Kardashian than Madam Curie or Mother Teresa.
However, this does not mean that people with principles have gone extinct. They are still around but they cannot find their way to a position of power or success. More often than not we observe that the offices of power are held by rich and influential people who are morally corrupt. Youngsters who follow them on social media and elsewhere get the impression that the honest cannot succeed in this world. Consequently, they give up on their ideology and choose to tread the easy path that would take them to success.
In conclusion, values have certainly become irrelevant in the twenty-first century. This could be due to various factors such as the influence of the media which constantly raves about the rich and the famous. Another factor that contributes to the demise of age-old values is the fact that honest and ethical people are struggling to succeed in this materialistic world.
- the graph below shows predictions about the numbers of people who will study three major world languages between 2020 and 2030 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 33
- People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life.What are the most significant of these problems?How can these problems be tackled? 67
- A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons 73
- The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...one often makes inconsequential remarks in regards to things that does not affect one in the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ur, generosity, and trust do not amount to much in todays condemnatory world. Apro...
^^
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'drivers'' or 'driver's'?
Suggestion: drivers'; driver's
...t because she is friends with Elaine, a drivers daughter, notwithstanding the fact that...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, similarly, so, while, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76080691643 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79808242449 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547550432277 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2352451256 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9166666667 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164223210123 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621491950814 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553242078819 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898719368119 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397185753007 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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