Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for
any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
The capability of playing musical equipment oftenly be said as one of the most precious aptitude of ‘any’ child. I personally do not entirely accept this, and I will explain why in this essay.
Firstly, we are to precieve that ‘only’ for children willing to be a musician or an artist playing musical device becomes so important to achieve before their juvenile phase. For example, there is no need for the one who has no any intention the be a gutarist to learn how to play guitar. Instead, It is better for them to brace their current hobbies than learning how to play music so that it could be their worthy skill which could be their achievement as well. For instance, to be elected in national football player team could be the most important achievement for some children enjoying playing footbal. Finally, there are also a lot of opportunities such as competitions in science, sport and other fields that they can pursue becoming their most precious achievement. It could be a proud accomplishment for children even for their parent if they could become the champion in a competition.
Obviously, it is sometime said that to be able to play musical device needs huge effort such as a lot practices that it is reasonable if children become proud of themselves at the time they can master it. However, considering that children have their own preferred things to achieve, I percieve there is no compulsion for any child to be able to use the instrument.
To conclude, This is not to say that being able to play musical equipment at early age is entirely in vain. There are benefits in terms of improving children’s intelligence. But to say that it is one of the most important for ‘any child’ is to ignore that children have their own expertise.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e, there is no need for the one who has no any intention the be a gutarist to lear...
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Line 2, column 254, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ed for the one who has no any intention the be a gutarist to learn how to play guitar....
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92636794907 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513071895425 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5795113788 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.230769231 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182280723711 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078969116629 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508202670941 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140214819415 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554984486474 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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