With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
Although,it is being observed that education play a very essential role in wholesome development of children in this educated world,it is not indeed to regret non-academic skill.Despite,With the burden on present young generation to succeed academically,certain section society opine that the non-academic subject should be vanished from the system. Consequently,it diverse their mind and they not can concentrate wholly on their academic study.I partially agree with scenario,and According to Oxford University, both are equally essential for wholesome development of an individual.
To embark on, there are multiple reasons why people assert that other activities like physical workout has equal importance as compare to academic study.first of all,most of time people doing their work on sitting a chair or bed and follow the new "sedentary lifestyle" as result of which their body fell very lethargic but,in order to make arglie people should give preference to physical activities such as yoga,playing sports etc.In addition,according to scientists research, their hormone in body which release when a person doing physical activity ie dopamine which is beneficial for health and helpfull in diverting brain from one think to other therefore,physically fit person can achieve their goal faster then Thertically knowledge once.
I would like to addsome more point to support why people believe it not necessarily for everyone.there are quite few reasons behind this suppostion that is some people only concentrate in non-academic skill which not so good for their study and further take Thertical knowledge as lightlybut in actual they lost their life by these non related activities.for instance,they are numerous of people who try to get perfection in sports field so it very difficult task complete it however,if a person can not speak and write English language in this educated era then he will not do anything even if, he is best in their non-academic skill.therefore,education provide a basic knowledge for these activities.
To conclude,this essay has thrown light that both are equally important for being Seccuss in life and students try to do both academic or non-academic study because no one knows in which field a person is perfect.
- With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic sub 89
- With the pressures on today s young people to succeed academically some people believe that non academic subjects at school eg physical education and cookery should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects 75
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These days, due to high…
With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people
believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery)
should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on
academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days, due to high burden on young generation to become successful compulsory in study, it is often argued that non academic subjects such as physical fitness and cooking education ought to be cancelled from school system. As a result school children can give 100% focus on main educational subjects. In my opinion academic and non academic, both subjects have equal importance for betterment of children's future.
On the one hand, physical exercise, cookery learning,playing sports and other entertainment activities training as part of subjects in school have great opportunities for children to make a career in their favourite fields. This is because, children can find their interest branch easily so that they can concentrate on that field in future and to gain success easily. Another important aspect to be considered is that spending time in non academic subjects work as a stress buster and relaxing formulas. In this way children can take break from main subject study as well as develop others important life skills like teamwork. This is indirectly helpful in latter stage of life . For instance, after playing sports, children can feel fresh and understand the value of every members of sports.
On the other hand, education of academic subjects are basic need for survival in this compititive morden world because without their knowledge ,it is almost impossible to live desirable life. For example, mathematics is primary requirement in order to make a bright career path. In every steps of life, mathematical numbers involve in such a way that bank works , business or in many other professionals, it is compulsory require. Moreover, children should know atleast ground level education to stand in compitition for future. To illustrate, English is international language therefore it is essential to learn in school for children to face future tasks.
To conclude, both types of subjects are similarly significant for bighter life of children so, school syllabus does not have to change especially in this modern globe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72334293948 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.68365325432 2.80592935109 131% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613832853026 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 16.0721442886 12% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 173.0 20.2975951904 852% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 815.0 49.4020404114 1650% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 993.0 106.682146367 931% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 173.5 20.7667163134 835% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 54.0 7.06120827912 765% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271241003376 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237396922588 0.084324248473 282% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349562363811 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161177155261 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617393379246 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 92.3 13.0946893788 705% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -121.04 50.2224549098 -241% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 73.1 11.3001002004 647% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.08 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.54 8.58950901804 193% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 71.2 10.1190380762 704% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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