The pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners nowadays. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is commonly believed that business owners are mainly focus in generating profits is a good motion. However, there is a more persuasive argument that the high spirit of making lots of money is a negative phenomenon which can lead to financial misconducts on the side of business holders.
On the one hand, the economy of the country will be able to thrive swiftly if business owners are motivated by profits. The appeal to become prosperity propels them to make their businesses more successful. Being as a rapidly successful company in the business world would bring many benefits for the society since it promotes the instant growth for the entire economic system. For example, when corporations strive to maximise their turnovers, it eventually would result in a significant progress. This enlarge the cash flow in the overall economy and boosts economic production. To abreast of, the companies have to employ more people, which create more jobs and lead to even more money entering the economy.
Nevertheless, focusing heavily on profits will lead to several wrongdoings in the regard of finance, such as graft, bribery, extortion. People may be tempted to skirt laws, such as anti-monopoly and corruption regulations, to make even more money if they focus tremendously on making themselves rich. This is evident from studying the economic growth of some Asian countries shifted to free-market system, the desire turns out to be far-reaching, and the amount of lawlessness increased dramatically. This would severely compromise the traditional orders of the society and eventually disrupted the development of those fledging economies.
In conclusion, while there are several advantages for business holders to pursuit the prosperity, it is apparent that the drawbacks of focusing on making money are far more significant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'focused', 'focussed'.
Suggestion: focused; focussed
...elieved that business owners are mainly focus in generating profits is a good motion....
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Line 2, column 475, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'significant progress'.
Suggestion: significant progress
...urnovers, it eventually would result in a significant progress. This enlarge the cash flow in the over...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34948096886 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93356229965 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581314878893 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.310784963 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150774197413 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537156176136 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511520026305 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948930179773 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483536795565 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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