Q11 Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the protection of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with issues of humans should take precedence over preserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that mankind should prevent animals from disappearing do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that the conservation of animals plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity that is invaluable. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for making an effort to save animals, the food chain and ecosystem would be broken due to the extinction of numerous endangered species of wildlife, exerting a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than animal protection in this globalisation era given that hindering animals from going extinct is not directly related to individuals' daily lives. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming as a multitude of citizens across the globe are suffering from global warming because not only does it give rise to climate change, but it also hinders everyday people from having an improved standard of living. Another grave issue is global hunger since it is directly related to the life of humans. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the world's population died due to poverty in 2010. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that devoting huge amounts of money and energy to preserving animals is undesirable for the reasons discussed above.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s who are on the top of the food chain. My opinion, however, is that there are a...
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Line 5, column 722, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...e Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the worlds population died due to poverty in 2010....
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that devoting...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14501510574 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81884283009 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622356495468 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1726242599 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.642857143 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6428571429 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28134950944 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769515770453 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592992667201 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143155248464 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552654836236 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s who are on the top of the food chain. My opinion, however, is that there are a...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 722, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...e Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the worlds population died due to poverty in 2010....
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that devoting...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14501510574 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81884283009 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622356495468 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1726242599 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.642857143 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6428571429 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28134950944 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769515770453 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592992667201 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143155248464 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552654836236 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.