Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Violence
According to the recent statistics, various psychologists attribute the increasing violent crimes rate among juveniles under 18 to the lack of social and emotional guidance from parents. In my perspective, while I slightly agree with that point of view, I believe that other social factors also contribute to outpouring (surge) in criminal activities. Some of these several reasons are domestic violence and media. Further, this essay will shed light on the following aspects.
To begin with, teenagers nowadays are affection-deprived, due to the long working hours of their parents. Teenagers who are affection-deprived are more likely to experience depression and stress, and overall in worse health conditions. They suffer from anxiety and immune disorders as well. Secondly, domestic violence also has a huge impact among the youth. People usually believe that domestic violence is only limited in physical abuse, but the ugly truth which is not confronted by people ; is that domestic abuse is shaped in many forms; such as verbal abuse, comparing your child to others and insisting on perfectionism. As a result, teenagers will end up with dozen of mental issues, as low self-esteem, feelings like never being good enough and being unworthy. Therefore, they rebel against the society and their parents, by doing and creating riot behaviors.
In addition to the above, external influences as Media content is spoiling the innocent perspective of the little ones. For instance, a TV series I saw recently had a lot of inappropriate content with substance abuse, alcohol consumption, violence. It is greatly famous amongst the youngsters and can affect them in various ways. Social media is an incredible tool to express our feelings, thoughts and ideas, at the same time, it can seriously alter our happiness and lead us to several crimes. Consequently, it is crucial to have control over what we are learning and teaching our sons and daughters.
To conclude, I deliberately agree that not only little parental guidance, but other factors such as drugs and games also result in juvenile crimes. This surely needs to be addressed with caution before it leads them to a bad future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2735042735 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91847380434 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638176638177 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.013625083 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.833333333 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167655919608 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452336333133 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639227792262 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993284741925 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851974172122 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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