In recent years, there has been growing interest in relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high level of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail to their individual merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success.
In my point of view, the egalitarian society is an ideal one in which people have the same rights and opportunities. I completely agree that people and community can achieve more in this kind of society.
In Knowledge-based economics period, education is an important factor with regard to personal success in life. Moreover, education is an essential right of human that all children should have access to free schooling, and higher education should be either free or affordable. If people could not have same opportunity to approach education, only children and young adults from wealthier families can achieve success through better prepare for their careers on job market. It can encourage their personal position and their families' privileged, but in a long period, it is the reason of society's instability, bigger wealth gap harmful effect on prospects of others.
I would argue that the egalitarian society does not conflict with the freedom to succeed or fail. If people can access to equal education, they could have clear awareness about the value of achievement and failure, so they can have real freedom to choose their career paths. By contrast, I believe that equality in rights and opportunity does not vanish motivation or allow people to fail. Most people will feel more motivated to work hard and reach their potential if they think they are living in a fair society and their efforts are recognized deservedly. Inequality, on the other hand, would be more likely to demotivate people because they would know that the odds for success were stacked in favor of those from privileged backgrounds.
In conclusion, I submit that equality of society plays an important role in relationship with personal achievement of members in community.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, kind of, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18596491228 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79542342422 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554385964912 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3908596971 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200308952377 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776603464257 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511524171751 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133848917902 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301541462479 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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