As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the age of technology, people tend to sit on the sofa watching television and using the computers instead of taking part in outdoor activities. While I agree that this trend can lead to some diseases in people, I believe there are some other reasons that negatively affects their health.
On the one hand, the introduction of computer and television truly has negative impacts on people's well-being. Since electronic things appeared, people's home life has become so convenient and interesting that they tend to spend most of their time staying at home. People would gradually prefer watch a favourite program or play an appealing computer games rather than go out for a walk or play a sport. This leads to an inactive lifestyle and can cause a lot of diseases. For example, spending too much time staring at the screen of the television may result in some eye-related diseases, especially in children who are becoming too exposed to technology. Moreover, some people may get obesity if they sit in for too long without physical exercises.
On the other hand, electronic devices are not the only causes of people's negative health conditions. Other bad habits can also contribute to people's getting diseases. For example, those who consume too much fast food without doing exercise will possibly get down to obesity. Furthermore, those who study for too long without enough light may also be involved in eye-related diseases.
To sum up, I agree that with the inventions of electronic devices, people's health has been negatively affected by avoiding them from physical activities. However, there are still other bad habits which are not related to technology but can damage people's well-being. People should be aware of this problem and moderated their lifestyle to stay in good health.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...Other bad habits can also contribute to peoples getting diseases. For example, those wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11224489796 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68499230417 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3213036041 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.2 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234750319308 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807431756712 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561279167558 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150366872745 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042889926289 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...Other bad habits can also contribute to peoples getting diseases. For example, those wh...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11224489796 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68499230417 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3213036041 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.2 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234750319308 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807431756712 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561279167558 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150366872745 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042889926289 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.