The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
There is an opinion that art and music should be excluded from children's education to allow pupils to focus on more important subjects such as information technology. This will help children properly prepare to prepare properly for life in the modern world. I partially agree, because this can have both a positive and negative impact on the further development of education in general.
My contention is that creativity now is as important in education as literacy and we should treat it with the same status. Creativity is the process of having original ideas that have value and comes about through the interaction of different disciplinary ways of seeing things. If we remove creative subjects, we will get robots that will solve problems using particular algorithms. For instance, our medicine. More and more doctors treat people according to certain rules without paying attention to the individual feature of a particular person, which result in very serious consequences in the future. The second thing that needs to be said is that creativity develops a personal qualities. Developing yourself, a person improves and learns to think unconventionally. All this allows humanity to progress.
As far as positive aspects are concerned, by removing creative subjects from school education, we will be able to pay due attention to more serious subjects. We cannot ignore the fact that applied sciences require more careful study. If we put music on a par with physics, then during the time that is allocated for training sessions, the child will not be able to properly understand either music or physics. As a result, the child will receive only some superficial knowledge which is not enough for subsequent improvement. Another positive thing is that this way children will be able to fully study useful subjects at school and if they want to go to additional classes in an art or music school. So the child will be able to get good knowledge both in important subjects, and in such as music or art.
Taking into consideration all mentioned above, I can conclude that the complete exclusion of such subjects as art and music from the school curriculum can have both positive and negative effects so it is impossible to say exactly whether it is good or bad.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'quality'?
Suggestion: quality
... is that creativity develops a personal qualities. Developing yourself, a person improves...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, then, for instance, in general, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04255319149 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7953025979 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534574468085 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.842260204 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235300387462 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684704305612 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800162567602 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165550243392 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995411298321 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.