School should focus more on teaching students how to be successful in the workforce and less on helping them achieve academic success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the education field, it is thought that emphasis should be laid upon teaching career-related skills for success rather than improving students’ academic performances. While I recognize the role of success oriented lessons, I believe that student’s academic achievements should be attached more importance to.
To certain extent, success oriented courses are necessary. Such courses, including vocational training not only play a role in enhancing practical skills such as crafting and cooking, but also teach students to apply theoretical knowledge to real-life situations, which are not taught in textbooks. Therefore, these courses contribute to a student’s occupational competency and psychologically better prepare him for a highly competitive labor market.
However, I think this is the time when students need to absorb knowledge and discover a suitable career, rather than knowing how to be successful in the labor market. Students should pay attention to academic learning, for the subjects from the syllabus lay a solid foundation for their knowledge in various aspects, from science to literature. Through advancing academic performances, students would enhance such soft skills as communication skills and managerial skills, which are necessary for daily situations and even future jobs. Moreover, the learning process provides an opportunity for pupils to identify their strengths in certain fields, and therefore exerts an influence on their career path’s decision. For example, those who show passion for maths and physics would pursue a career related to science. Additionally, when hiring employees, recruiters may considered an applicant’s academic background as a factor to evaluate his competence.
In conclusion, I believe focusing on academic performances is more beneficial than preparing for success in the future career.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87453874539 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12441331757 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630996309963 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3291821365 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221932502619 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922081983641 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819625070254 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164457298145 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834261088912 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.06 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87453874539 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12441331757 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630996309963 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3291821365 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221932502619 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922081983641 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819625070254 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164457298145 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834261088912 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.06 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.