Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Children nowadays are spending more time on screen-time activities. They use it to entertain themselves due to their parents' business. This, in fact, harm the children a lot and seem to be a negative development.
As we all know, people always need in-person communication because it is one of the most effective ways of communicating. The ever-increase of time used on technology devices of children could make the face-to-face communication decrease. This, in turn, might lead to the lack of mutual social communicating among the children. They could get used to chatting and talking with other people via phone not in person. Consequently, this in the future, might create a world where even parents don't understand about their children.
Moreover, spending times on the smartphone also make the children become more dependent on the Internet. They are used to searching everything on the Internet, with non-official sources. For instance, when don't know something, instead of asking adults and researching on a variety of sources such as book, dictionary, magazines and Internet, they just concentrate most on the Internet researching because they are getting used to with the non-in-person communication and they find it is hard to ask other persons. This will not only cause the lack of correct knowledge but also the dependence on the internet among the children.
One of the cases that I can see clearly from my family is one of my nieces. When she was just a toddler, her parents were so busy that couldn't spend time for her. They just gave her a smartphone and let her to use it from the early age. This, in turn, made her become more dependent on the phone. Consequently, she is now so much introvert and she find it hard to communicate with other people, even her parents. Her parents once had me become her tutor and I was shocked because she knew a lot of things but most of them are wrong, due to her phone researching.
In conclusion, let children to spend hours every day on their smartphones is considered to be a crime due to the fact that it can ruin their future. Instead of that, parents should spend more time communicating with their children.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...might create a world where even parents dont understand about their children. Mor...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on-official sources. For instance, when dont know something, instead of asking adult...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... toddler, her parents were so busy that couldnt spend time for her. They just gave her ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 349, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...y, she is now so much introvert and she find it hard to communicate with other peopl...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8972972973 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88496771462 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489189189189 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1378660086 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148392398136 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549123085326 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491293092364 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101375273243 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470804723663 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...might create a world where even parents dont understand about their children. Mor...
^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on-official sources. For instance, when dont know something, instead of asking adult...
^^^^
Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... toddler, her parents were so busy that couldnt spend time for her. They just gave her ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 349, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...y, she is now so much introvert and she find it hard to communicate with other peopl...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8972972973 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88496771462 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489189189189 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1378660086 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148392398136 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549123085326 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491293092364 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101375273243 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470804723663 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.