In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels health and fitness is decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

The rising levels of Obesity and metabolic diseases is a grave concern for some countries. The major contributing factors behind this trend are change in lifestyle and consumption of imbalanced diet.

Evidence suggests physical activity levels and eating patterns have changed in many countries. With increased development, majority of the population are now living a sedentary lifestyle. Many people are now engaged in jobs that require minimal movement. In addition, long working hours are leaving very little time for them to engage in any fitness or exercise programs. Further, this lack of time is also pushing them to adopt unhealthy eating practices. This scenario is further exacerbated by easy availability of packaged, ready-to-cook and fast foods. As a result, majority of people have now given up cooking meals at home and prefer eating at restaurants, office cafeterias or fast food stalls. Thus, increasing number of people are now at risk of developing diseases such as Obesity, Hypertension and Diabetes.

However, the good news is that this trend can be attenuated by adopting certain measures. Firstly, governments and public health regulatory bodies should organize awareness and education programs in local communities. These should aim to provide people with information about the health implications of increasing weight and absence of exercise. Secondly, local councils of countries should ensure that they allocate sufficient funds to develop suitable infrastructures such as parks, cycling tracks etc., so that more people are encouraged to be physically active. Lastly, strict regulations should be imposed on food manufactures to provide detailed information about nutrition on food labels. This will help people to make healthy food choices.

In conclusion, while inactivity and imbalanced dietary habits have resulted in increasing risk of overweight and related diseases, appropriate measures such as education and development of suitable infrastructure can be taken to ensure better health and well-being of population of vulnerable countries.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71935483871 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0061141303 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61935483871 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6376943174 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.294117647 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159989621557 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453245125046 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366490438355 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876230449998 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291673712884 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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