In recent years, it is widely observed that public health in numerous countries has been negatively affected by the increasing amount of fast food consumed. Thus, it is argued that to tackle the issue, it is best for this kind of food to be taxed more by the authorities. I am inclined to disagree with this point of view for several reasons, which will be discussed thoroughly.
On the one hand, some people believe that the most effective solution to reduce health risks related to junk food would be imposing a higher tax on it. This is because the more this kind of food is taxed, the higher its price could be, and as a result, the public is less likely to pay for such expensive products and may switch to more nutritious ones including fruits and vegetables. Hence, a lower amount of lipid is absorbed, which would keep people away from health problems caused by fast food. Nevertheless, junk food might be consumed more among the rich, so higher prices are no problem for them. Consequently, health risks resulting from it is still a concern among this group of people.
In my view, a far more feasible approach to this problem is to encourage the public to exercise regularly. To do this, the governments should foremost provide adequate infrastructures such as the gym, swimming pools and sports centres for the residents to use. This might be proved to be a better solution as most people who consume an excessive amount of fast food are most likely to suffer from obesity due to the amount of lipid it consists of. As they exercise more, the lipid could be considerably degraded, leading to lower health risks concerning fast food.
To sum up, although it is undeniable that imposing a higher tax on junk food could bring about some benefits, I suppose that encouraging people to go out and exercise more frequently would be a better solution to the health problems caused by this kind of food.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, i suppose, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70746268657 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56175062664 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7643354283 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393028003119 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147444283008 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607959194641 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258095497975 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465147760444 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, i suppose, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70746268657 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56175062664 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7643354283 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393028003119 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147444283008 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607959194641 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258095497975 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465147760444 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.