in some countries, a lot of children have health issue and are becoming overweight. some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
In several countries, many children have health issues and get obesity. Some individuals believe that the public policy makers should be responsible for overcoming this phenomenon. For a reason, I personally agree that it is important for public leaders to take action towards this problem.
Firstly, the government plays significant role in society. Executive has the power to govern the people while legislative has the responsibility to draft rules which are needed by people regardless of any circumtances. Kids are parts of society, therefore, they should be protected by the public leaders. If children had medical problems, obesity for example, they would have to be provided good doctors and other well-approachement medical services by government.
Nevertheless, few people think that it is unecessary for mayors, for example, to involve in children’s heatlh problems. These people argue that the responsibility of the children belongs to their parents and not government. They add that policy makers should discuss about larger issues such as, environment or employement rather than dealing with kids’ medical issues.
However, in my perspective, children’s health is a serious problem. Medical service is a primary need to society; hence, public leaders should take actions to fulfill their people needs by providing health aminities properly. The better the facilities are served by government, the healthier they are.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the public policy makers have a big responsibility for all their people including children, thus, it is a must for public leaders to provide much more better health facilities for overcoming children’s health problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66147859922 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05978125875 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571984435798 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6649330409 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.928571429 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307781301649 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106592390127 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589157627429 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180622125532 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679121408941 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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