In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In these days, it is ubiquitous for the young generation who take a break after graduating high school to work or go abroad. This trend would create certain benefits but there will also some drawbacks.
On the other hand, it is clear that broaden the horizons or working would bring about several advantages. One evident strength is that it would make the youth more independent. This is because they spend the whole year immersing in another culture and country, as well as solving the real world problems by themselves. Consequently, adolescents who dare to step out the comfort zone, they could find the purpose of life and enjoy whole life without any regret. Another reason is that it would help young people gain many hands-on skills, which is essential for their career. For instance, in the software area, when adolescences take a year to face up the real-life problem, they could stand out at the employment marketplace.
On the other hand, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. First and foremost, there is a possibility that they will fall behind when compared to other students. If students were wasting a gap year to hang out with buddies or be addicted to the game, they could not enough strong motivation to follow the academic program in university. Second, the young generation could be demotivated by money which is made from work. In particular, there are many possible cases that because of high-paid jobs, they may decide to drop out the academic course. However, this is claimed that the academic period is a vital opportunity for every student to explore themselves.
In conclusion, there are plus points to experience the company environment and abroad culture regarding independence and high-income skills. However, the downside would emerge consequently in terms of waste time and money attraction.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, i think, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77133105802 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67173810219 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580204778157 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0520439202 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265197398669 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080867551304 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645535284238 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155693646543 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05316191369 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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