In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
Many cultures, children are seldomly told that they can obtain anything if they attempt hard enough.
Why people giving this message children's mind?
In the social point of view, we are saying him this sentence, they make efford, dedication and try to hard. Some cultures think if we are making motivation him, children believe to achieve anything. Considerably, there are disadvantage and advantage.
The beneficial side, we are making him to try hard, they believing in themselves and try to achieve on purpose. However, it is not easy and has a difficulty if child do not achieve him or her goal maybe is brought bad mood. In result, they do not rely on this messages which they can obtain anything if they try hard enough.
The disadvantage, we are making him to try hard, they do not understand our sentence and children think, what we want to do anything that it is too dangerous and bad things. For instance, we are making to try hard , their motivation is growing and enter the different way.
In the economic point of view, we should say children, try to work hard and when they are young, knowing social and economic life step by step. They try to learn more and more about education. If people only study and understand life's difficulty, then, they probably achieve plenty of successfull.
To sum up, try to learn, try to know, try to work hard, therefore you are perfect person and attempt is brought several result for you. Remember, if you not win this work, not sad, this is why you know that your experience is increasing again.
In additional, children's future related to their parents because they often say that their children go to the right direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ad mood. In result, they do not rely on this messages which they can obtain anything...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... For instance, we are making to try hard , their motivation is growing and enter t...
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Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun result seems to be countable; consider using: 'several results'.
Suggestion: several results
...e perfect person and attempt is brought several result for you. Remember, if you not win this ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, you know, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76975945017 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53784453959 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518900343643 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9808182888 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.75 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.505469613535 0.244688304435 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167178024081 0.084324248473 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137973449165 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235784817549 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144323434397 0.056905535591 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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