In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children that message?
There are a significant number of meaningful advices influenced by many cultures in the world. Among some of them, children are taught that the key point of having a successful life as well as to achieve anything is to make enough efforts. There are many benefits and drawbacks brought by this message which are going to be discussed hereafter with explanations.
There are many advantages associated with this trend. To begin, the message given has the ability to inspire children to work and study as much as possible. The reason is that without making efforts, children will not be able to survive in such severe situations and become a burden of the society so that they will reverse its development. Furthermore, encouraging children to work hard allows them to achieve necessary practical skills and experiences. As a result, children in the future will stand a good chance of being occupied for a better jobs with higher salaries.
On the other hand, disadvantages do exist among numerous advantages. One of the most significant problematic situations is that children have tendency to become over ambitious. Ultimately, They will try at any cost, even in illegal methods and end up their life in jails. In addition, in many aspects, this message can make children disappointed . The principal reason for this is that there are significant number of achievements that require not only hard work, dedication and practical skills to gain. There for, children will try in vain and waste their time.
To summarize, although their are many advantages of giving children the message to try hard, its disadvantages is various. Therefore, it is worth considering this message in different situations
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14079422383 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86581178382 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552346570397 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0089274329 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3125 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339515870299 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100493212415 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713278685118 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208302378164 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363232442388 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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