Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instruments To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instruments.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some parents let their child build a connection with musical instruments from a very early age because they believe and follow the advice of some educators. I also share the same belief system with the crowd and provide points to support my belief.
Firstly, every child’s mind is no different from a blank canvas. That’s why they have the ability to adapt and learn better than adults. Musical instruments in general and classical instruments to be specific are considered as a challenging form of art, because they consume a lot of time to practice. By spending time to master a music piece, the kids can develop their resilience and patience. Scientists have proven that by remembering the musical chords, the child’s mind will become sharper and develop their logical thinking. Another benefit of learning an instrument is that it will help boost the kids’ concentration by paying attention to every beat and well as the little details.
Secondly, musical instruments are a joyful way for the youngsters to develop social skills. After spending time learning lessons and techniques, the child can join a band. A band usually consists of members from different age groups. By that the kids will have the opportunity to communicate with strangers and make them more socially active, increase their confidence and improve their public speaking skills. To some extent , music will always remain as a useful stress-free tool for humans despite their age. That is why by preparing a friend for cho kids since they are little, will help them feel less lonely in adult life. Those circumstances will help lower the rate of anxiety, depression and sucide that teenagers and grown ups have suffered.
To conclude, musical instruments have numerous advantages to both the child's mental and physical health. That is the reason why all children should be provided with instrumental instructions.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16883116883 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6956316459 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3016658595 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6470588235 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1176470588 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194055365812 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062961321695 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535955696518 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138530936686 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442341502599 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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