Some feel that individuals should try to assimilate completely to the country where they live, while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both views and give your own
In this modern era, preserving the people own culture such essential to be consider although they inhabit in the other country, whereas others believe that they should try to be meld with the new circumstance including such hots culture. Both of views appear for several reasons which will be elaborated in the following paragraph.
On the one side, objectors of assimilating the host culture might bring the individuals identity as their reason. The demonstration of the people own culture draws such pride and to be deeply every individual would feel sense of their native culture in depth of their heart. Furthermore, as an act to promote their culture internationally probably as a good way to convince the local society to know more about their culture. It could be with using such attribute according to their culture such ritual in their home and accept their neighbor to join with them.
On the flip side, exponents of this issue concern that in conjunction with greeting of society in hots country, individuals might consider to adjust their own culture to be a new one. With receiving the new culture, it might be the best way to show respect to their new environment. In addition, being meld form such approach might be able to become people knowledgeable. Due to the new insight (ritual and habit), this could make people to be open-minded where it provides the other sides of various perspective except their own culture.
To sum up, it seems to me that adjusting self being a part of the local culture bring several benefits including to be welcomed and be more insightful in terms of the various perspective. This is as long as the people remain proud of their native culture.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...lating the host culture might bring the individuals identity as their reason. The demonstra...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider adjusting'.
Suggestion: consider adjusting
...iety in hots country, individuals might consider to adjust their own culture to be a new one. With...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...ew environment. In addition, being meld form such approach might be able to become p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, whereas, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89930555556 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68040937641 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6977608373 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.583333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210403860947 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878739340068 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575875734867 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133353186396 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059951200847 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...lating the host culture might bring the individuals identity as their reason. The demonstra...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider adjusting'.
Suggestion: consider adjusting
...iety in hots country, individuals might consider to adjust their own culture to be a new one. With...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...ew environment. In addition, being meld form such approach might be able to become p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, whereas, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89930555556 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68040937641 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6977608373 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.583333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210403860947 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878739340068 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575875734867 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133353186396 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059951200847 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.