Some people argue that advertising is discouraging people from being different individuals, and makes people to be or seem to be the same. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, a debate is raising to argue whether people are influenced to bear a resemblance to others due to the advertisement make them being dependent individuals. there are both for advocating and against this view, I believe it depends on different reasons.
it is undeniable that by some invisible ways, advertising offers the common trends to residents nowadays to encourage them to be similar together. Firstly, most of the humans are easily unintended shoppers. In addition, adverting has an immense function is that making people engrossed in world of fantasy where they can provide themselves a newer, prettier, slimmer appearance throughout shopping, so it’s not weird if some “slaves of shopping” buy something on impulse when they see some satisfactory goods on advertised media without knowing that those products have been bought by many other people. Secondly, almost citizens have the inclination to run along the novel things. Particularly, modern society enable lots of new brands to develop, lead to their own beautiful products can become “a tendency”, possessing those trendy label goods can make people extremely proud and superior, that’s why it is not unusual if humans purchase the same items to catch up new trend to compare to fellows. For instance, the youth these days are fond of buying the kind of clothes called “Hoodie”, because those clothes are very catchy, fashionable, so when a popular branch shows the advertisement about publishing many new designs about Hoodie, they immediately get it. As a result, advertising becomes successful in creating peer effect and make surrounding people to bear a liking to others during using their own same products which are the most trendy.
However, I am more convinced that promotional fields seldom drive humans to be analogical and independent. Initially, advertisement doesn’t play a decisive role about getting people buying something but surrounding circumstances do. In other words, customers rarely afford goods relying on advertising, they are going to consider about their income levels, budget, discounts, … first and then asking advises throughout family, friends, and so forth. Besides, there is a psychological effect that clients have low tolerance for sameness. To be more specific, the preference of customers are much more uncertain, selfish and sophisticated, which means they can’t accept the fact that their peers bear the same clothes with them although it is just tiny items like rings, necklaces. so the advertising can’t easily affect the customers until they definitely precept that this product is exclusive wearing. For example, many mothers present-day hate to wear family clothes with their husbands and children or couple clothes with their friends. Consequently, existing brands are more and more vulnerable because they don’t have enough ability to order consumers to pay attention on their produces due to lots of severe situations relating to the complex fondness and high-level suspense.
In conclusion, while reasons can be given to justify that publicity brings out negative effects that people begin to be sensitive, dependent, susceptible and behave similarity with others obsessively, I think this is not an accurate statement under any circumstance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2798.0 1615.20841683 173% => OK
No of words: 508.0 315.596192385 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50787401575 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89403286969 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 176.041082164 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604330708661 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 856.8 506.74238477 169% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5469251596 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.444444444 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2222222222 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227504176739 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685751409192 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072785538951 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16264365183 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442853796965 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 78.4519038076 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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