Some people argue that holding sporting events is beneficial to countries’ development. However,
other people hold the opposite opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many hold a belief that preserving sports occasions does a great job in boosting the development of countries; while opponents argue that it could bring about many serious problems. To the best of my knowledge, the former point of view is more reasonable for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is note-worthy that sporting events contribute significantly to the local tourism industry. Nowadays, many studies have shown that the successful organization of sports events, typically on global scale, is accompanied by the increasing number of foreign tourists. For example, the Olympic Games and World Cup promoted development of domestic industries like accommodation, transport or entertainment to satisfy the requirements of more visitors. This example is the illustration of the fact that holding sports festivals has chronic effects on host countries’ development.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by objectors to this is that holding sporting events needs many budgets from governments; otherwise, local governments and authorities that on the tight budget have to spend on various social aspects, typically medication or education. This argument could be true to some extent; however, it is incomplete. What they fail to take into account is the fact that despite high expenses of organizing sports occasions, sports events are regarded as one of the top priority to governments as preserving traditional culture. For instance, Brazil’s football is the most popular sport around the world, which is a prominent part of national identity. As a result, sporting events should be protected to develop countries’ culture.
In conclusion, holding sports festivals plays an instrument in countries’ development towards tourism industries and traditional culture in a long run as mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many holds'.
Suggestion: Many holds
Many hold a belief that preserving sports occasio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71955719557 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19946415088 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612546125461 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7868211433 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.166666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195900752454 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709836524379 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444903317791 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120457077167 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010661892657 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.32 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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