Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during school day Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that children nowadays should be prohibited to use their mobile phones over school day. While other people take the opposite view, they think that children should be used their phones. The essay will look at both views and explain why I think allowing children to use their phones is better than prohibiting them to use phones.

A growing body of research that using mobile phones has a generally effect on children's study. One key benefit is that children can research by themselves for their study, they do not need to help from anyone. Taking Finland for an example, more 50% high schools in there allow students to bring their phones to school so that children can self-study at their schools.

However, there are also negative impacts which must be considered. One important issue is that children bring their phones to schools to play games instead of self-studying. This means that not only interfering with their study but also creating bad habits on children. For instance, in Viet Nam, about 5% students did not pass the entrance exam because they spent too much time on their phones. Although phone's invention is seen as a key driver of human's growth, it also can lead to the formation of bad habits, such as spending too much time on screen,...

In conclusion, phones can benefit improving children's study but children can also be threatened by its bad effects. In my opinion, despite having such negative impacts to children, I believe that phones still bring more positive impacts to not only children but also all of people around the world.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('generally') instead an adjective, or a noun ('effect') instead of another adjective.
...f research that using mobile phones has a generally effect on childrens study. One key benefit is ...
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Line 5, column 554, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...such as spending too much time on screen,... In conclusion, phones can benefit ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, so, still, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89219330855 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40720026594 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57249070632 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2852877687 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.230769231 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453685888791 0.244688304435 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172840870067 0.084324248473 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110747301381 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281681259823 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127741784031 0.056905535591 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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