The proportion of children who are allowed to use private phones is rising. While some believed that is valid to accept children with this, others argue that children who are limited age should be prohibited from having a phone when still ungraduated. In my point of view, children are not old enough to have their social devices, specifically, personal phones to use at school.
It is undeniable about benefits that smartphone bring these days, especially in education. Children can actively find solutions to their questions within a minute. Moreover, education shows on social media such as learn math through a song, know how to spell by watching youtube spelling programs, …etc play a significant role in supporting parents with developing kid's intelligence. For example, learning the alphabet through a song on Youtube helps children remember faster and longer, recent researches have shown.
On the other hand, I would argue that giving unaware generation rights to use the private phone will bring numerous consequences. Young ones have not had enough awareness to distinguish appropriate contents which boost their minds. This causes serious aftermaths such as copying substandard behaviors, do not have their intelligence increased, having harmful thoughts, …etc. For instance, Vietnamese kids who are allowed to use a phone from an early age mostly have themself interested in following bad actions and we have witnessed an increasing trend of under eighteen who have been arrested.
In conclusion, although indubitable benefits which digital devices could bring to support educate young generation, ungraduated should not be accepted to have individual devices, they can only use them under permissions and for education purposes.
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- Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional and religious festivals during festival periods people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52044609665 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82525435325 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657992565056 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6441131589 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27494265026 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103128803035 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079868311182 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164127778432 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117682562912 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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