Some people believe that children should do organised activities in their free time while others believe that children should be free to do what they want to do in their free time Discuss both views and give your opinion

In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that children are advised to partake in scheduled activities in their spare time. However, other people argue that children should be liberty at doing everything that they love. From my perspective, I subscribe to the latter idea.

On the one hand, if organized activities are outdoor pursuits and children do not show their fascination with them, it will prove challenging to force children to follow scheduled activities. This is because children only want to engage in pursuits that they are truly fascinated by. For instance, a child having a great passion for drawings will seldom lean toward participating in sports activities, so it is virtually impossible to organize this kind of activity for him or her. In addition, in the case that children are allowed to join their favourite outdoor pursuits, this means father and mother respect their offspring’s options, leading to the fact that it will be less likely to have conflicts between them and their children when it comes to this problem.

On the other hand, there are a lot of other activities which should be scheduled by parents or teachers. Firstly, those are ones which are helpful to society such as doing charity or voluntary works. To be more specific, these activities will educate children on the significance of sharing and sympathizing with other people, so they will help them understand humane values. Thus, it is necessary to schedule this type of activity for children. Secondly, learning survival skills can become a pursuit that ought to be organized by teachers or parents. When partaking in this activity, children will have great opportunities to comprehend the importance of survival skills in their real life and through that, they will have more motivation to be proficient in those skills like swimming.

In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that children should have the freedom to engage in any pursuit that they feel interested in but in some cases, scheduled activities are necessary.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'forcing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: forcing
...on with them, it will prove challenging to force children to follow scheduled activities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in some cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15160349854 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76237490091 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548104956268 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.334113153 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.214285714 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28237189297 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103049157328 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694496499274 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1882273703 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450116015872 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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