Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion
From the perspective of some people, aid agencies gain little or no significant public awareness from well- known personalities. While this is true to some extent, I personally think that celebrities’ fame can help spread quickly and widely the problems all over the world.
On the one hand, those who support the idea that superstars’ fame can reduce the problems’ importance have their own justifications. The most primary explanation is that using personal reputation of renowned celebrities to take community ‘s attention is highly risky due to their funny and entertaining way to represent the problem. Thus, their fan as well as other audiences might see the problem less severe. Additionally, the public often pay attention at what the personality does than what the hidden words is and the reason why he or she does that. Take the Ice Bucket Challenge with the aim of raising knowledge of ALS disease and promoting international donation for research for example, despite drawing several celebrities’ participation like Mark Z, a huge number of people only take the challenge without digging deep into the meaning of it.
On the other hand, I believe that taking advantage of famous people’s assistance is a good choice. Firstly, their fame help make the problems popular among the international community by society mass media. In some regions, the personalities may be more well-known to the locals than those kinds of organizations. Furthermore, celebrities themselves have a considerable amount of influence on the public. For instance, Angela Jolie, a Oscar-winning actress who is famous for Mrs Smith or Maglificient role, is now working as a humanitarian in United Nations Refugee Agency for promoting awareness and donation for refugee welfare worldwide. As she is a role model for her fan, her actions undoubtedly gain her adorers’ attention and support.
In conclusion, while some people have reasons to believe personal fame can have negative effects in people thought, I support the idea aid organization using their influences to approach community’s attention.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...the public. For instance, Angela Jolie, a Oscar-winning actress who is famous for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44848484848 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2856926121 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612121212121 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7861612206 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.428571429 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216343535498 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733031332606 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535096735943 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141931223475 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349047629271 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.