Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important.
While some people think that zoos play an important role in protecting animals and are ecologically important. However, others say that keeping animals in places is cruel and unnecessary . During the course of the essay, I would explain both given perspectives objectively before drawing a rational conclusion as my opinion.
Obviously, there are a host of reasons to support the first statement; nevertheless, I would present the two most widely accepted ones. While zoos can provide a safe and controlled environment for animals, many zoos do not provide adequate space or enrichment for the animals to thrive. Additionally, animals in zoos may suffer from stress and anxiety due to their unnatural living conditions. The second is that it does not bring educational value to visitors. For example, the normal visitors will not know the natural habitat of the animals, or the interactions between species because in zoos they are kept separate.
Meanwhile, the second point of view is not without reasons. Modern zoos have many very interesting features. This is also the place where the family takes the children to go sightseeing and outdoor activities to bond together. At the same time, people can learn and understand more about them and this can help raise awareness to help preserve certain species, especially endangered ones. Furthermore/ on top of that, zoos can help conserve endangered animals by keeping them safe from poachers and other threats. They will be cared for by experts, and scientists will study and breed them to avoid the risk of extinction.
In conclusion, both sides have their own reasons to support; thus, each of them is true to a certain extent, depending on the cases. As a result, there should be some improvements for traditional zoos and also development of modern ones
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...imals in places is cruel and unnecessary . During the course of the essay, I would...
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Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'During'.
Suggestion: During
...ls in places is cruel and unnecessary . During the course of the essay, I would explain both given p...
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Line 2, column 24, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
... as my opinion. Obviously, there are a host of reasons to support the first stateme...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...in species, especially endangered ones. Furthermore/ on top of that, zoos can help conserve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13898305085 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79777871559 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613559322034 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.428795596 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.75 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312241951086 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902108843523 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111622412211 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188045512375 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108378050762 0.056905535591 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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